The Great War
He stands in the trenchMotionless, he will wait
For the whistle to be blown
And decide his fate
The screaming, the blood
The sounds of the gun
The misery, the horrors
Part of World War One
He listens and looks
Hears the agonizing shouts
This is not what he signed up for
But it’s what war’s about
A nauseating smell fills his nose
Harsh shouts, a dreadful cry
Quickly, he puts on his mask
While near him, so many die
Bullets fly everywhere
Their throats are dry, bodies sore
They can't stop, they have to fight
Because the guns never cease to roar
He came to war, exuberant
Excited like never before
Now he leaves, wounded
Lucky to live, one day more
Sources:
www.army.mil/asianpacificsoldiers/Images/wwi.jpg
z.about.com/d/history1900s/1/0/O/3/wwi16.gif
z.about.com/d/history1900s/1/0/M/3/wwi15.gif
www.chemical-corps.org/history/images/GasAtta
schools.4j.lane.edu/churchill/library/classes
3 comments:
Arushi,
I really liked your poem a lot. I liked your rhyming and it made sense.Your stanzas were grouped together very well and stayed on topic. I think you could have added some more punctuation and line breaks to add more of an effect. Also, you only had 4 pictures. But good job overall!!
Arushi
Your poem was really good. I liked how you kept the same rhyme scheme through out and it really made your poem really good. Your pictures were really good but you only had four so try and get five.
Nat
Arushi,
I thought you did a really good job with your rhyme scheme, with having only two rhymes in every stanza. Maybe you could add in some similes, metaphors, maybe even some effective pauses to your poem. Your pictures were good and went well with each of your stanzas, but you needed 5 pictures.
But overall, Good Job. (:
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